Wednesday, February 2, 2011

You've got a direct order to rock out like . . .

Rock out like state champions, rock out like when you receive a 4.0, rock out like when you get play your first game of the season, rock out like you just made varsity, rock out when you hit your first home run and your second in the same game, like when you know your hard work just paid off, like when one season ends the other begins, like that first jam sesh, like opening day, like the first pow day, like when your legs are on fire but can't stop because its too much fun, like when you're lost in the trees, like you just rode away injury from a bad fall, like when you stomp a trick, like when you stomp a new trick, like when you get the first chair, like when you get first tracks on your favorite run on a blue bird pow day, like after a picture perfect pow slash, like after having the perfect day.

4 comments:

  1. About 1/2 way through you quit putting "rock out" in front of your sentences, I think would sound a little better if you put it in there a little more.

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  2. I take it you are a baseball player. Pretty good inference eh? Anyway, not sure i like how you started talking with 'rock out' but then discontinued the use of that phrase. I think you should have either said it just once at the very begining or used it throughout.

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  3. I like how you didn't put yours in the list like everyone else did. But you did make it all one sentence and stopped with the rock out even though that was the point of it. It's not like we're graded on this stuff though so who cares!

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  4. you sound very adventurious. can we go to a "pow" day sometime? i might need some help tho:)your a really good writer. i felt like i was on the baseball field with you!

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